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I am asleep now yet im in this ancient place
I dont know where i am
its dark and its scentless
are my eyes open?
can i see?
I push my right hand into the dark
I swear i can feel something
how can dark get darker
Is that how dark should feel like
its vibrating
im looking ,looking for sight
now something is radiating
im not afraid
i dont feel like screaming
now where am i?
i look on my right side
and i see a room
its getting somehow familiar
is this daylight
or coloring failure
i touch my face
its there ,its covered with dust
no not dust ,sand but rather soft
i reach down to my chest
im covered with cloth
it feels like cotton
but dry
i suddenly realised that im not breathing
and according to my heart he ceased beating
im calm but on the brink of panicking
i brush the thought aside
is that silence im hearing
it sounds delicious
am i in love?
so why is it so dark?
this state is getting slightly vicious
to my simple divinty
i believe i can move
but there's no sign of activity
i try to twiggle a toe but i fail
is this the land of insainty
a sudden thud claims something fell
im not weak but i can suggest a state of fraility
am i dead?
if so ,how can i tell?
This is for ~Electrobaby's request for writting about our fears....
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SpinningBackwards Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2006
Oooh this is good. i see why you won. it makes me think of what it would be like to wake up and there is nothing around you. everything is gone, just a color. ya know like an old daffy duck cartoon and everything has been erased and hes in a sea of white. like that but with your black. thats what i picture with this anyways.
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shebo Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2006  Student General Artist
u got some cool imagery with this:)

and thank u for reading it:)
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SpinningBackwards Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2006
de nada!
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shebo Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2006  Student General Artist
mucho gracias,then;)
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Jazz-YOU Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2006
Very blunt and specific! Touche.
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shebo Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2006  Student General Artist
woooohoooo :blowkiss:
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Dancing-Naked Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2006   General Artist
I hope you don't mind ...

but

I might of ... well ok

I re-wrote it.

In my sleep I have been relocated to an ancient place of woe.
Yet if you asked me to give said place a name I would not know.
The darkness offers no hints as it is with out sent or sound
I do not know where I am
I feel my eyes because I can no longer tell if they are open or shut tight to this new way of life.
I wonder if I can see, and if I canít can they see me.
My hands push in to the darkness, trying to separate truth from friction
I swear I almost felt Ö something.
Maybe even felt the missing girl.
Is this what the darkest night looks like?
Vibrating with energy that I have summoned from all over me washing over me
My eyes search blindly for light.
Yet this space Iím in gets darker by the moment.
I didnít think black could be that deep.
Maybe I should open ripe lips to scream, but I donít feel like listing to the mess of echo.
I have found my self in some place new.
But I still do not know where I am
I look right and left
I see a place I might have known in another life.
Has daylight come to find me or did the blackness have a fade out failure.
My hands move to my face taking in the familiar textures almost as if they can taste the flavour of my gritty dusty skin.
Fine sand covers me.
My skin no longer exposed to the elements but covered in what might have been a cotton sack.
My body stops needed its life blood of oxygen and my heart decides itís beaten its last pitter patter of self defeat
Thoughts are brushed aside to enjoy what could be silence that Iím hearing
It is rich and deliciously all mine.
Might this be love?
I still do not understand the darkness.
this state is getting slightly vicious
to my simple divinity
I am under pressure
I believe in me and that my limbs can move and breathe.
Still no sign of activity in this war of senses the forefront lies quite.
Have I found the recess?
I try to move each appendix of my body but I fail missberly.
Have I been taken to the land of insanity?
A sudden thud alerts to me the fact that something among me has it the ground.
I refuse to be made weak but I admit to a state of frailty
If this is death, how can I tell?
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shebo Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2006  Student General Artist
now im really freaked out!!!!!:P

but i like mine more:P

but thanx for the remix...i love the thought:)
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Dancing-Naked Featured By Owner Sep 18, 2006   General Artist
aww sorry, and yeah they are very differnt, it just came to me as I was reading it for like the 10 time but I made it more my own the more I got lost in the words.

K
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shebo Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2006  Student General Artist
u read it that much!!!

well im glad u r back from the lostfulness:)
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Dancing-Naked Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2006   General Artist
I did I was trying to find a way to like it :P

lol I'm here
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shebo Featured By Owner Sep 19, 2006  Student General Artist
ur late:P
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Dancing-Naked Featured By Owner Sep 20, 2006   General Artist
Aww, sorry your missing me :P
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shebo Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2006  Student General Artist
well i do....im not good at lying:)
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Dancing-Naked Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2006   General Artist
To be honest, I'm not a big fan of this. It's just ... mmm parts of it stand out but I just get lost in the muddle of words. It might be my head at the moment.

meh

:hug:
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shebo Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2006  Student General Artist
hmmm maybe coz i was confused between 2 fears:)

its not good i know....i said the prize is urs....so thats my lame trial:)

i was aiming for a second place;)
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Dancing-Naked Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2006   General Artist
aww bless you, if you take out good and bad and replace it with what works and what donsn't work.

This works :)

x
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shebo Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2006  Student General Artist
:strong: :D
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ElectroBaby Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2006
ooo, a friend of mine has this same fear


:clap: I shall link you!
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shebo Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2006  Student General Artist
of being buried alive?:)

or what?
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ElectroBaby Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2006
buried alive, I'd say it's her biggest.
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shebo Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2006  Student General Artist
well my fear is of never dying actually:)
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ElectroBaby Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2006
oh really? that's interesting, I've not really thought about it. You must never have wanted to be a vamp for halloween then (small laugh at attempted humor) :D
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shebo Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2006  Student General Artist
nah i dont find vampirism cool:P

who would live for sucking blood ,come on:)
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ElectroBaby Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2006
I think the blood thing is kind of meant to be erotic
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Dancing-Naked Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2006   General Artist
*cough*

I so might agree with that ;P
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shebo Featured By Owner Sep 17, 2006  Student General Artist
well i think that makes Blade the Don juan of vampires:P
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